Hamish Phillips feedback

HAMISH PHILLIPS!!!!

• Did the introduction capture you? Yes it did although he needs to keep the audience captured within the facts. He did well with this but it is hard to keep people engaged when talking about facts.
• Is there enough information to convince you of their opinion? Yes because he is talking about children he makes you put the position in your arms and this makes you sad. It is a mix between Ethos and Pathos but mostly Ethos which is why he has to keep the audience engaged with the facts.
• Is their opinion clearly organised? Yes he really wants to get this put in the open about how bad it is. He is telling us that it is very bad and that it leads a percentage of children to end up in jail and commit a violent crime.
• What suggestions would you make to improve the speech? Involve the audience and keep asking rhetorical questions like you already are, because it really engages them.